first edits...
posted by trancendyce at 4/19/2006
Twisted:
Vicissitudes of Lila Jolita Devlin
Trick had gifted Lila with a gorgeous black leather whip with a handle of carved shells to use for the performance. She had passed it among her friends and they had all had so much fun playing with it. She had named it Uzumaki Cho after one of her favorite Japanese horror films Uzumaki and her favorite comedian Margaret Cho. Uzumaki means spiral, which had seemed most fitting for a whip. She had seen Cho in stand-up and had dreamed of a version of Uzumaki staring Cho that was so f#cked up and so funny she had awoken laughing about it.
trancendyce interrupts... When I've been writing there is this one place in the text where the period at the end of the sentence keeps disappearing. Is this a haunted period... or what? Creepy to think about, huh?
Twisted:
Vicissitudes of Lila Jolita Devlin
At that point Beverly and Kara came up with an unknown, very cute, fashionable and wasted looking guy in tow.
"Hey birthday girl!" Lila said to Beverly as they touched hands.
"This is Jordan, say hello to Lila, Jordan." Beverly said while Kara whispered loudly in Lila's ear, "Isn't he a hottie-hottie?"
"Hello Lila," the very attractive and stylish Jordan said taking her hand and kissing it a bit much for someone he was just meeting. He was grinning like a fiend, "You are so good... mmmh tasty... I really enjoyed your show!"
"It was a group effort, but I'm glad you liked it. Nice to meet you Jordan." Lila answered laughing as she politely pulled her hand away from Jordan. "Kara luv, might I drag a smoke of yours?"
"Why yes you may, Lila darlin," Kara answered fishing a cigarette and a lighter out of her jacket pocket. "I'll even light your fire." Lila took the cigarette brought it to her lips and Kara flicked the flame to the tip while Lila inhaled. Lila had found that waving a lit cigarette around was a rather effect way to get most drunk guys off her. She also liked the way cigarettes were like fire wands. Lila had dreamed of Bettie Davis fencing in Now, Voyager with her long cigarette in its even longer smoke through holder filter thingy. What the hell are those things called anyway? (Seriously, I want to find out. So if anyone knows... please put it in the comments for this post.) The action was thus... Exhale smoke. Davis says something cutting. Thrust and parry in the cloud of smoke. Take a long drag. Feint and thrust. Exhale smoke. Davis says something biting. Parry and feint in the cloud of smoke. Take a long drag, etc. Until finally Davis puts out the lit cigarette by stabbing it through her opponent's heart.
Vicissitudes of Lila Jolita Devlin
Trick had gifted Lila with a gorgeous black leather whip with a handle of carved shells to use for the performance. She had passed it among her friends and they had all had so much fun playing with it. She had named it Uzumaki Cho after one of her favorite Japanese horror films Uzumaki and her favorite comedian Margaret Cho. Uzumaki means spiral, which had seemed most fitting for a whip. She had seen Cho in stand-up and had dreamed of a version of Uzumaki staring Cho that was so f#cked up and so funny she had awoken laughing about it.
trancendyce interrupts... When I've been writing there is this one place in the text where the period at the end of the sentence keeps disappearing. Is this a haunted period... or what? Creepy to think about, huh?
Twisted:
Vicissitudes of Lila Jolita Devlin
At that point Beverly and Kara came up with an unknown, very cute, fashionable and wasted looking guy in tow.
"Hey birthday girl!" Lila said to Beverly as they touched hands.
"This is Jordan, say hello to Lila, Jordan." Beverly said while Kara whispered loudly in Lila's ear, "Isn't he a hottie-hottie?"
"Hello Lila," the very attractive and stylish Jordan said taking her hand and kissing it a bit much for someone he was just meeting. He was grinning like a fiend, "You are so good... mmmh tasty... I really enjoyed your show!"
"It was a group effort, but I'm glad you liked it. Nice to meet you Jordan." Lila answered laughing as she politely pulled her hand away from Jordan. "Kara luv, might I drag a smoke of yours?"
"Why yes you may, Lila darlin," Kara answered fishing a cigarette and a lighter out of her jacket pocket. "I'll even light your fire." Lila took the cigarette brought it to her lips and Kara flicked the flame to the tip while Lila inhaled. Lila had found that waving a lit cigarette around was a rather effect way to get most drunk guys off her. She also liked the way cigarettes were like fire wands. Lila had dreamed of Bettie Davis fencing in Now, Voyager with her long cigarette in its even longer smoke through holder filter thingy. What the hell are those things called anyway? (Seriously, I want to find out. So if anyone knows... please put it in the comments for this post.) The action was thus... Exhale smoke. Davis says something cutting. Thrust and parry in the cloud of smoke. Take a long drag. Feint and thrust. Exhale smoke. Davis says something biting. Parry and feint in the cloud of smoke. Take a long drag, etc. Until finally Davis puts out the lit cigarette by stabbing it through her opponent's heart.
3 Comments:
It's just a cigarette holder, but I did think I had heard a fancy name.
http://www.holderfaq.info/
Thanks for sharing this delicious language. I enjoy these snipets of story. Love, crow
yeah, i think cigarette holder....
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